Minggu, 07 Juni 2009

Holiday Task 2

Telling:

She sat heart-broken on her bed.

Showing:

Tears streaming down her eyes. Darkness filled the whole room with gloomy emotions. Pain struck terrifyingly on her fragile heart, making her tears drop like a waterfall. As the time passes by, she dropped on her knees. Unable to bear the excruciating pain, she decided on a life-changing decision. A sharp shiny knife on her hand, which will inflict acute pain for a moment that will end her suffering is her decision.

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  1. Anonim11 Juni 2009 pukul 22.40

    Good effort Vincent. The details of her actions were very telling of how she was feeling.

    I was a little confused by this sentence though:

    No sense could be heard yet the tense could be felt.

    It probably needs to be rephrased.

    BalasHapus

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